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Monday, 14 June 2010

Citizen Goth

Hated by most, even though this was my attempt at bringing at picasso-esque art style into mainstreme view with a modern satirical story.
Citizen Goth

Yes it failed, but I still think the storyline is great> everything connects back to each other. Too bad the art sucks.


Here is the original script:

GOTH KID

SCENE1()

Opening shots()

(Overlooking the city we see people throw garbage on the floor and going about their daily business. Cars roar up and down the street. We see a sign saying: WELCOME TO L468f3h#a City, the land of opportunity
We keep tracking across and then into a house where a lazy young kid is slumped down watching TV

We see the show start

The presenter who is a young homosexual man bounces on the screen to audiences cheering him.

Presenter: Hello Boys! (quieter suddenly) and girls TO ALL NEW CELEBRITY SURGERY

(show clips of celebritys operating on a man)

voiceover twenty celebrities take over from twenty doctors with no training whatsoever.
Will they complete the surgery or will they fail miserably

Show a young muscular male celebrity operating on a healthy female

Voice: We got hidden cameras watching there every move

The Celeb leans down and licks her face and then he starts operating

Celebrity Surgery tonight at 9

(cut back to the show)

Presenter: (Pushes his lips together) Looks bloody brilliant,


The kid is sat there frowning

Kid: (lisp) what the ffffffff

Presenter: SO a what did you all have for breakfast! Wait wait wait did I say Break! Oh ha ha I did time for a break Boys!


Kid snarls.

The presenter goes backstage, where his boss (dressed as a pimp)
Shirt tag: TV BIG BOSS
is waiting

Boss: Bitch that was fucking terrible, fucking terrible, terrible fucking

The presenter begins shaking and drops down on all fours

Presnter: I’m still back after the b break aren’t I?



He crawls over to the boss and brushes his nose on his legs

Presenter: oooh

Boss: your ass you will be,

We see the presenter sent flying to the pavement

Boss: right I rang for a replacement bitch, he will be here in bout half an hour

Worker: but sir…

Boss: its in its ad break

Worker: for half an hour

The worker scampers off

The boss wipes his head and removes layers of socks from his pants



We see Frosties kid advert on a continuous loop

Kid: aghhhhhh! He throws his remote smashing the TV

Kid: Bleed!

His mother enters who is a scientist and wearing thick glasses

Mother: sweety I’m being scientific in here, shouldn’t you be at the work.


Kid: yeah

The kid walks out slamming the door

(we pan through the city as we do we see an old pensioner hit by a car:
No one stops and a bunch of people cross the road)

Scene: kids work

The kid is frying burgers and passing them through when his old fat boss comes in

Boss: hay ya doing kiddo

Kid: I’m okay Boss

Boss: thought I’d have a chat to ya, seeing as ya all alone

The kid grits hit teeth

Kid: No I’m really okay Boss

Boss: are you really happy here

The kid puts on a false grin

Kid: yes I’m really really happy

Boss: there I was stood Jim, there on Nigger street with just a condom and the clothes on my back…

The kid throws a steaming hot burger at him it splats on his bald head.

Boss: aghhhhhhhhh!

Kid: I’m sick of you abusing my lonely job position with your perverted imaginative stories it is bloody awful.

Boss: Ultimatum time, its either my sack or the pavement

(the kids blinks and opens his mouth)

We see the kid getting thrown out on to the pavement

He stands up
Kid: bollocks

(pan across the city)

We see a sign stuck out saying “ RED LIGHT DISTRICT 54545252352413” There is a sign under it saying: “PLEASE KEEP THESE PREMISES TIDY”

A bunch of prostitutes and the presenter are stood by the road side

Presenter: I want me old job back…

and a police car is driving past

Prozzie 1: P… Police quick girls lets make ourselves decent

They all put on their KKK masks on

The police car pulls up revealing a big hairy cop

Cop: are any of you men

The presenter raises his arm

Cop: get in the car

(cut to black)

We see the kid again walking down the road quickly he gets to the end of the pavement where a teary eyed woman is stood there

Woman: I’m going to do it, this is the end, I have nothing else to to to live for

The kid grabs her

Kid: Ya not going to kill yourself now

The woman pulls out a knife and stabs herself

Kid: what the…

He pushes her in to the road and storms off

Kid: ohhhhhhhhhhh fucking hel!!!!! Aghhhhhhhh!

The presenter is storming down the same way with a ten pound note,

Presenter: fucking cheap son of a fat smelly dirty ass fucking aids ridden bitch

They bump in to each other.

Kid: watch where ya going piss-head

The presenter gazes over him

Presenter: yeeeeeeeessss my old job is calling. (he turns his head and we see a building in the backdrop)

(cut to black)

We see the kid getting makeup and being reworked with chains and in a studio

The presenter is shaking hands with his old boss

Boss: I’ll tell ya bud, the kids will eat him up and so will the rest, we will be covering him forever fucking brilliant discovery.

(we see him come out of the studio all goth he swings a chain and flies away.

Boss: be back before dark

Gothkid enters his house and runs upstairs

A man with glasses is sat watching TV.

Man: hello son

We see the box

TV: You’re watching Nick JR with Celebrity storytelling!

We see a bunch of kids sat in a reading circle

Presenter: today we have 50 cent telling a story to the children

50 sits down with Red riding hood

Presenter: lets begin

The kids gather around him as he speaks

50: fo shit motherfuckering bitch nigger fo shit nigger nigger fuck ass come over fuck nigger bitch motherfucker

We pan to the kitchen where his mum is experimenting on a monkey
(she is sawing its head off)

Gothkid comes back down with a bag

Gothkid: I’m leaving home mum bye!
Mum whirls around and looks over her son

Mum: you look like a murderer

Goth: yeah I’m taking the whole world head first

Goth kid leaves slamming the door

Mum frowns.

We see Gothkid flying through cities and then forests fighting corrupt governments, Terrorists and an ancient Cyclops.

He is also headlining the papers and the TV presented by the presenter

We see three robots watching from cliffs.

They jump down and imprison Gothkid and throw him through a time warp in to a laboratory

Goth: who who are you, FBI, CIA?

Voice: No

Goth kids mum walks down,

Goth: mum!

Mum: there was no other way I could stop you, now that you’re all big! I had to build, create to save my most beloved creation

Mum walks closer to Goth

Main Robot: Creation, we are, we are the least beloved creation

Second robot: we want, we want freedom, free we are self aware.

Mum: oh dear… in order for them to catch a non comformist I made them a little similar

Third robot: Opressor must be mudered

First robot fires his bullet at Mum killing her

Gothkid: Muuuuuuuuuuuuummm!

They fly away and Goth kid breaks free and holds his mothers dieing body

Goth: m mum!

(fade to black)

Goth kid enters a shop
(metal music)

He buys chainsaws and every other power tool

He strolls into the city where he sees the robots up on top of a high building

Robot 1: All human life must be

Robot 2: eradicated

Goth kid flips his chain and flies up there beside them

Robot 3: It’s the Gothkid

Goth kid throws his chainsaw straight into Robot 3 and jumps in the air

The robots jump up and duel in the sky. Goth Kid throws a punch at Robot 1 denting him

Robot 1 slaps Goth to the building roof.

The two robots then start kicking him in like thugs.

Goth snaps two and knocks them both down he then swings his chain in the air and disappears in to the sky.

The two remaining robots get up and look up as Goth comes flying down with a chain.

(cut to black)

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